Line Edit: Trim, Tighten, Tune
Flag phrases like “very,” “really,” “sort of,” and “it should be noted.” Replace them with concrete verbs and nouns. Ask a peer to highlight every hedge in yellow; then revise until the page reads decisively and confidently.
Line Edit: Trim, Tighten, Tune
Swap “there is” openings for action: “Clerestory windows flood the studio.” Prefer active verbs over passive structures unless attribution or emphasis requires otherwise. Your design narrative will feel immediate, purposeful, and memorable to discerning readers.